Tuesday, June 27, 2006

पाऊस कोसळू दे - संदिग्ध

"पाऊस कोसळू दे" वरून मला सुचलेले काहीबाही. या रचनेला गझल, हझल, विडंबन कश्याच्या दावणीला बांधावे ते कळले नाही त्यामुळे मोकाट/संदिग्ध झाली आहे.


पाऊस कोसळू दे
छपरातुनी गळू दे

घाई कुणास आहे?
तू दे, हळूहळू दे!

बगळ्यास मान दे अन
हंसास कावळू दे

दे बैल दे कधी दे
गायी कधी वळू दे

पाहून या दिव्याला
सूर्यास काजळू दे

सावर मला जरासे,
थोडे घरंगळू दे!

"मूर्खांस टाळणे" हा
सन्मार्ग, मज कळू दे

प्रेरणा - पाऊस, पाऊस कोसळू दे

12 Comments:

At 3:54 AM, Blogger borntodre@m said...

he he :)

सावर मला जरासे,
थोडे घरंगळू दे!


Ekdam zakkas!!!

 
At 9:37 PM, Blogger Vasud Torsekar said...

just amazing :))

 
At 1:19 PM, Anonymous Anonymous said...

as usual mast aahe.....
tumchya sense of humour chi daad dyawishi watate.....pratyekweli....

"murkhas taLane" ha sanmarg tumchyamule kaLala.....aata waLu de mhanaje zale...

manogat waril.....2 bedkanchya goshtichi tatparye aflatoon hoti...

aani tumcha 2002 madhla photo zakas aahe.....aatahi titkech god dista, pan there is too much wisdome in ur eyes now...(take it lightly)

shashangati sada ghado
shashank vakye kaani pado
....hich prarthana, gudluck!

 
At 10:33 PM, Blogger shashank said...

मंदार, वसूद, आणि अनॉनिमस,प्रतिसादांबद्दल आभारी आहे.

 
At 8:43 AM, Anonymous Anonymous said...

namaskar shashank ....

bhartane pakistan viruddha match harlyawar dekhil jitka nirash vatala nasel titaki nirasha mala 'mandar'ne tumhala lihilelya testimonial mule aali...

alcohol????? aamchya kuthlyach pidhichya kuthlyach vyaktine kadhi alcohol che naav kadhle naahi.....aani mi alcohol piun pratisaad dila????

(punha ekda maaf kara....public place madhe asa lamblachak reply dilyabaddal....)

i viewed ur profile today...after months ofcourse....its true we adore,admire, worship or whatever ur WRITTING.....and its true u look sweet (oh God! not again, mandar plz control urself)...ok i accept, i was wrong.....(and heck! i dunno why am i giving this calrification? and to whom?)
(mandar, enjoy this response also)

 
At 8:51 AM, Anonymous Anonymous said...

to us, what matters is ur 'writting'....and not looks,('that comment' was like 'i saw and i wrote' without thinking....so learnt one lesson today....not to use words without thinking......anyway it will never happen again....

 
At 8:55 AM, Blogger shashank said...

नमस्कार निनावी,
अहो निराश होऊ नका.
मी असे म्हटलेले नाही आणि मला तसे बिलकुल वाटत नाही. त्यांनी असे गमतीने म्हटले असावे तेंव्हा कृपया मनाला लावून घेऊ नका. तुम्हाला वाइट वाटले असल्यास माझ्या मित्राच्या वतीने मी माफी मागतो.
कळावे, लोभ असावा
शशांक

 
At 7:04 AM, Anonymous Mandar said...

I came here after a long time and really surprised to see the comments from anonymous! I think if ppl can't read between the lines then they better send their response by personal emails..or atleast put their names while writing comments!
Well I never like to enjoy anonymous comments as well and I am certainly not enjoying this one!

And I don't understand why Shashank has to say sorry for that...If u r upset (more than when Ind loses to Pak...for which I give damn) then I must tell u that I don't know who you are and you probably don't know me .....so its hard to digest the reasons for being upset ....well if u r ....then let it Be! ;-)

 
At 7:18 PM, Anonymous Anonymous said...

this is bad! really, shashank why did u say sorry? nobody need to say sorry.

i hv statrted this whole thing...now lemme finish it...

@shashank.....

i was thinking y'day i might hv over reacted on ur testimonial....'its ur testi, written by ur fren to u',(tyamuley mi phakta vachun sodun dyayla pahije hota)!(i knew hes just kidding but that alcohol thing freaked me out..)so my response might have bothered u....and i m sorry for the same...(this is one of the nicest site n i m feeling guilty for doing all this fuss in here)

@ mandar

Thankyu!(its genuine).bcoz of u i came to know my mistake n hereafter i will keep in mind the social sense while writting in public space.still, ppl can appreciate a person without being drunk and a person may be admired irrespective of his age, gender and color.

-
Kshitija

 
At 6:14 AM, Blogger prashdazz said...

Oh Shucks ! what is this Shashya & Mandya? I remembered the december of 2003 in Mumbai.
Btw,
घाई कुणास आहे?
तू दे, हळूहळू दे!
masta aahe. :)

 
At 5:45 AM, Anonymous shirish shitole said...

thode 'chalu' de
nantar 'malmalu' de
sukh kay aasate
ekada tari kalu de

 
At 3:01 PM, Anonymous Anonymous said...

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